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Caffa
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April 27, 2011
Caffa by ~SymphonyInWilde is a rich, dark musing on one of history's most brutal forms of warfare.
Featured by Halatia
Suggested by zebrazebrazebra
Literature Text
I cry from keyholes worn into my glands
and ulcerated joints. My friends
load me into a sling to give me
to the enemy. A snap, shuddering, rounded full stop.
Riding over the walls, I am a limp horseman
straddling my own waist.
and ulcerated joints. My friends
load me into a sling to give me
to the enemy. A snap, shuddering, rounded full stop.
Riding over the walls, I am a limp horseman
straddling my own waist.
Spreading the plague at the Siege of Caffa. They catapulted dead soldiers into the city to infect those locked inside. Lovely.
I edited it a lot. Text note:
"horseman" - i.e., Pestilence.
Edited again. I think the key to poetry is to make it as least dramatic as possible.
Another edit! A DD! Oh my! Thank you! Well, I'm glad I could spread a little bit of my historical geekery to you all today!
- Guys: STOP
ing without commenting. It's really frustrating and I'm sure you must be cluttering up your galleries if you do this regularly. As a writer I like feedback, critique and debate. It helps me get better.
- I've explained this a couple of times below but I'll stick it here: I dislike this poem. It's cryptic and over-dramatic. I'm grateful for the DD but I'd much rather people took the time to look over the rest of my gallery to see what I can do with careful editing and crafting, rather than bashing a melodramatic piece out after watching a plague documentary
I edited it a lot. Text note:
"horseman" - i.e., Pestilence.
Edited again. I think the key to poetry is to make it as least dramatic as possible.
Another edit! A DD! Oh my! Thank you! Well, I'm glad I could spread a little bit of my historical geekery to you all today!
- Guys: STOP
ing without commenting. It's really frustrating and I'm sure you must be cluttering up your galleries if you do this regularly. As a writer I like feedback, critique and debate. It helps me get better. - I've explained this a couple of times below but I'll stick it here: I dislike this poem. It's cryptic and over-dramatic. I'm grateful for the DD but I'd much rather people took the time to look over the rest of my gallery to see what I can do with careful editing and crafting, rather than bashing a melodramatic piece out after watching a plague documentary
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Brilliant work.